Short stuff

:Sneaks into the Lair and shakes her head at the dust: Looks like the Dragons aren’t home! Well, someone elsewhere was asking about ways to make stories shorter without shredding them to bits. I’m not great at explaining process, so I’ll post this on the cave wall. It’s a snippet of story and a first-pass cut for length. If I were to come back to it later, I might be able to cut more. Hope this helps!

81 WORDS The Tomboy was not an easy role. The adults looked at Sally with head-shaking disapproval. The other girls looked down their noses at her. The boys joked with her and pulled her pigtails. Except for Henry. In all the years they’d known each other, Henry had never pulled her pigtails, or called her Silly Sally.  True, his script called for him to be a Nice Boy, but he seemed to like being with her even when the Contract didn’t demand it.

 

59 WORDS The Tomboy wasn’t an easy role. The adults shook their heads at Sally’s antics  Other girls snubbed her. Boys teased her and pulled her pigtails. Except for Henry. Henry’d never pulled her pigtails, or called her Silly Sally.  True, his script made him a Nice Boy, but he hung out with her even when the Contract didn’t demand it.

 

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